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Chris Mehl's avatar

Beautiful!

Jack Krown's avatar

Thank you, Mr M!!

neena maiya's avatar

I haven't read anything as beautifully told as this in a long, long time.

I need to sit some place alone and think about everything here.

Jack Krown's avatar

You are way too kind, Neena. I and so many others are lucky to have you as readers.

neena maiya's avatar

Thank you, Jack. 🙂

And I'm only being honest when I say this about your writing.

Oleg Kagan's avatar

You've been on a roll! Another winning story!

Jack Krown's avatar

Thank you for reading these, Oleg! I’m honestly grateful if a tale transports readers, if only a bit.

Judy's avatar

Beautiful

Jack Krown's avatar

I’m glad you enjoyed it!

Gianni Simone's avatar

I've just turned 60. Recently, my wife and I talk a lot about retirement, money, and how our life will be in ten or twenty years. Sudden illness, or an accident, is what I fear the most.

Jack Krown's avatar

Blows, doesn’t it.

Augustus's avatar

This sounds very much like a town I cycled through while travelling across the inland sea. I couldn't find a town called Ohji, do you know the Kanji?

Jack Krown's avatar

I am so glad you read it and it rang true! While it’s based on a true story there is plenty of fictionalization in here, including the name Ohji Town.

The fact however that you can imagine the place from personal travels thrills me though!

Meredith Lewis's avatar

Thank you. A really lovely piece.

Jack Krown's avatar

I am so pleased. It came from an actual true story on TV. The moment I saw the segment I knew I wanted to write it. Paint it up, fill it in.

Gianni Simone's avatar

I see you are a "Potsunto Ikken'ya" fan, like me. Or "Gatsunto Ikkren'ya," as I like to call it.

Jack Krown's avatar

Try to watch it every week! Last night’s was weak but there have been a few memorable ones lately.